incomplete. i really was focusing on getting the values correct. exposures are wrong on both so im moslty looking for value relationship critiques. should i put that brush thier?
As far as putting in the brush, it doesn't take away from the piece compositionally. The real issue is where you want the focal point. Right now it's obviously on the skull. If you put the brush in, it has so much more color and value contrast (ie. shine) that the focal point will most likely shift to it.
For the values, I think the surface the skull is sitting on could be a shade darker. (Squint your eyes and look at the white of the skull in the photo compared to the sitting surface...the edge between the 2 values is much more defined in the photograph).
Alyssa is right about the surface being darker. That would help make the skull appear brighter. In comparing the two images, the shadow behind the skull looks like it should be a lot darker. Is the paint being shiny? Because when I saw the actual painting, that shadow looked like it was as dark as you could get.
Actually, x-that comment about value. I think the sitting surface is about right, but the skull is too dark...however, lightening up the skull would be A LOT of work. The easiest remedy to discrepency in value between the skull-sitting surface would probably be to just darken the sitting surface (as suggested in my first comment...it's just that the reasons backing it up changed).
incomplete. i really was focusing on getting the values correct. exposures are wrong on both so im moslty looking for value relationship critiques. should i put that brush thier?
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As far as putting in the brush, it doesn't take away from the piece compositionally. The real issue is where you want the focal point. Right now it's obviously on the skull. If you put the brush in, it has so much more color and value contrast (ie. shine) that the focal point will most likely shift to it.
For the values, I think the surface the skull is sitting on could be a shade darker. (Squint your eyes and look at the white of the skull in the photo compared to the sitting surface...the edge between the 2 values is much more defined in the photograph).
Alyssa is right about the surface being darker. That would help make the skull appear brighter. In comparing the two images, the shadow behind the skull looks like it should be a lot darker. Is the paint being shiny? Because when I saw the actual painting, that shadow looked like it was as dark as you could get.
About the paintbrush, I think another object would enhance the painting, but not the paintbrush.
Was that comment as useless as yours? :)
Jk. I don't like the how the paintbrush is parallel to the bottom edge of the skull. I think another round object would be more interesting.
Actually, x-that comment about value. I think the sitting surface is about right, but the skull is too dark...however, lightening up the skull would be A LOT of work. The easiest remedy to discrepency in value between the skull-sitting surface would probably be to just darken the sitting surface (as suggested in my first comment...it's just that the reasons backing it up changed).
all very helpful comments thank you. i think you are both right
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